Answer :
I think this is AWESOME, but I think the last sentence of your conclusion is a bit off. "If someone has an allergy to oil then they can still eat cake because applesauce makes an amazing substitute for oil." I think that you should say "This recipe is great for those who cannot eat/drink oil, the applesauce is an amazing substitute for oil."
I hope I helped! -Wajiha
I hope I helped! -Wajiha